LIFE

NO BURDEN OF GUILT (HAIKU)

Post author By amoafowaa
Post date February 5, 2015
10 Comments on NO BURDEN OF GUILT (HAIKU)

“Bone of contention?

He lived with a chain of thoughts

Ringing in his mind

Kong tang yang kang kong!

They rung, rung, rung rung non-stop

Until Pantan called

III

Those loads he carried

Those in his goodness married

Shunned him totally

Funny how life sailed

There was no burden of guilt

None asked for his mind”

A story heard too much

Responsibility is

Godly! People think!

Tags #AFRICAN POETS, #GHANAIAN POETS, GHANAIAN FEMALE BLOGGERS, love, POETRY., RESPONSIBILITY

By amoafowaa

Just a simple Ghanaian trying to find the best in our society. I may be fun, I may be interesting, I may be funny, I may even be foolish or intelligent, but it is all based on the mood in which you find yourself. I believe our minds make us who we are. Know that, pain, no matter its 'unbearability', is transient. Unburden or delight yourself for a while in my writings please. And all corrections, advice and opinions are welcome. Know that you are the king, queen or royal on this blog. :)

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10 replies on “NO BURDEN OF GUILT (HAIKU)”

How do you do it? I can barely get my thoughts into one haiku, yet you manage to make up a poem of many? OR…is it easier to combine them and therefore allow more room for your thoughts?

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I just gather my thoughts and when I know it is a haiku, 5-7-5, it flows. Never suffered that much forming a haiku. But you are also good at the descriptive, I guess we all have our power points. Thank you dear Marissa.

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Thanks. Yes, I just feel like it’s hard to make a point using so little syllables. That’s why it may be better to put it into a multi verse form.

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Actually, once you know your space, you can fit your words. So if I’m writing about needles; “Needles do thimble, at every painful hot pinch, their edges desire”. Try it, not that difficult. So you make five syllables, seven syllables and another five.

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How simple and beautiful! I think maybe the problem might be that I tend to go beyond simple, which is not to say simplicity is a bad thing, but I just try to always put some sense of irony into what I’m expressing which is difficult to do in such a small space.

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You can still do that in that space. About to post a mono rhyme Haiku, just read and see. Ironies don’t always have to be complex. Just try it, and step out of your comfort zone.

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